Don’t pick the one that lie to my face but get the water that will wets them out. Like my daughters and you the water or rain wet the crops that are mine King Lear and make them no longer queen or king. And if they make it and which they wouldn’t keep doing it over and over again until they die and if am still alive I would be king again ”Crown ,I am coming home, .”
You the water are like my best friend to me and you make me feel so happy but look at my two evil self -mental daughters.Look. Look how they made me go sooo mad I’m talking to a bloody water but still you are my best friend. But as I was saying why did they do it I know it was for power but why.Why ,should I talk to them! Ahhh am so upset I just want some answers that all just answer.If they don’t tell me , I will have to run away from this place and go to France to see kind beautiful girl and I hope she help me to find a place but if she doesn’t you my best friend will kill with you poisonous water. You will come with me on this big adventure and you will me new friend like the River Thames all other water ,rivers and lakes oh I am almost forgot the oceans. You might get a girl but if you do be careful don’t be like me okay and if you do again I might stay or you can kill me like I said before and I know we have been best friend for a three years what am so stupid because it is now been six hours of me talk, so much I need to shut up but before I go kill me am mad I lied about all of this am probably on drugs just kill me please.
March 23, 2016 at 10:19 am
Targets:
1) Use capital letters and full stops accurately (start and end of sentences).
2) Try to extend some of the images you use to make your point clear.
3) Make sure that you don’t repeat your language too much.